以为My first DIY job 为题,用英语写一篇短文, 词数90个左右。内容必须包括以下要点,也可适当发挥,但不要逐条翻译。
要点:1. 赶在妈妈生日到来前做了一个生日音乐盒,并对此加以保密以给妈妈一个惊喜;
2. 花了许多时间,在制作期间曾出错;
3. 将一朵真玫瑰粘贴在盒盖上;
4. 打开盒子后妈妈就听到生日歌;
5. 第一次亲手为妈妈做礼物, 妈妈高兴, 你更高兴。
My first DIY job
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One possible version:
My first DIY job
Mum’s birthday was coming, so I decided to make her a birthday music box. I kept this secret, because I wanted to give her a surprise. It took me three hours to make it. During the course of making it, many things went wrong. I sticked a real rose to the cover of the box. After Mum opened the box, she heard the birthday song. This was the first time for me to make a present for Mum with my own hands. Mum was very happy, and I was even happier.
题目分析:本文是材料作文,考生在写作之前必须认真读题,把握写作要求和写作目的。本文要求写My first DIY job,内容是给妈妈做生日礼物的过程。应该用第一人称,时态是一般过去时。写作前最好先列出提纲,写出有关的短语和固定表达备用。最后连起来。
【亮点说明】 本文做到了包含所有内容要点,语句通顺,标点符号运用正确。还恰当地运用了些短语和句式,如It took me three hours to make it ; go wrong等等。并注意了句子开头的变化和的衔接如:so,because and等等。