Thanks for your e-mail .I'm glad to hear that you're coming to Harbin, China,Now let me tell you something about it.Harbin is in northeast of China.It's very cold in winter.But it isn't very hot in summer.

With this suitable climate（气候）, there're som sights e where you must visit.For example,the Sun Island is famous for its summer resort(避暑胜地).And the Songhua river is the place that is for us to swim andboat.Personlly speaking（个人而言）, the Dragon Tower is a good place for you to look around the whole city.

Central Avenue（中央街） is the first choice for you to shop.If you want to go to some quiet places,I suggest that you should go to the church that is quiet and comfortable（舒适）.

Welcome to Harbin!

题目分析：这是一篇给材料作文。要求介绍哈尔滨的位置，天气及景点。本文所给材料比较详细，可以按照顺序依次介绍哈尔滨的地理位置，天气情况，旅游景点。根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般现在时态，主语是第三人称，写作中适当使用连词，使上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。复合句，固定句式的使用会给文章增色不少。

【亮点说明】这篇短文使用了合适的连词，定语从句和短语，可见该生英语功底扎实，.如连词: But ,With this suitable climate（气候），Personlly speaking（个人而言），等；定语从句：you should go to the church that is quiet and comfortable（舒适）. the Songhua river is the place that is for us to swim and boat.固定句式和词组：the first choice for you to shop, is famous for等。这使文章的表达更丰富，更有逻辑性，更富有条理。