请你根据下面提示,以A landslide(山崩)为题,写一篇70词左右的短文(开头已给出,不计入总词数)。
1.上周一早上,在连续下了两天大雨之后发生了山崩(landslide)。
2.我和妈妈在家,爸爸下午回来。雨很大。他叫我和妈妈赶快带伞离开。
3就在那时,房子开始摇晃,我们非常害怕,迅速跑开了。
4.第二天上午回家时,我们发现房子没有了,到处是碎玻璃和砖块,我们感到很悲伤。
A landslide
Last Monday morning, _________________________________________________________________________
One possible version
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A Landslide
Last Monday morning, after two days’ heavy rain, a landslide happened. I was at home with my mother. Father came back in the afternoon. It was raining heavily/hard. He asked us to leave quickly with umbrellas. Just then, the house started to shake. We were very afraid and ran away quickly.
The following morning, we went back home. We found that there was no house at all. There were only pieces of glass and bricks everywhere. We felt very sad.
题目分析:
这是一篇给材料作文,介绍我和父母经历的山崩。结合所给材料,可知本文主要考查一般过去时态,人称为单数第一,三人称,注意主谓一致问题,句子结构主要为系表结构,注意一些常见句式的应用,比如:I was……,It was……,及There were……等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词,注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序,符合逻辑关系,注意文后要表达自己的悲伤。
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑,语言简练。开头介绍了下大雨发生了山崩,接下来介绍我和妈妈,爸爸快速离开,最后写山崩后的景象。此处用了at home,were very afraid , at all. 等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。