Parents wish their children to have a bright future so they pay much attention to their study. After school they don’t allow their children to do anything except study.

I know parents love us and what they do is for us. Although it’s our duty to study, it’s not the only thing for us to do. There are many things for us to learn and we want to know more about the outside world. We should not only take exercise to keep us healthy but also read more literature books. So I hope our parents can give us more time to develop our hobbies.

题目分析：这是一篇提纲作文。本文要求按照所给的提示内容完成这篇孩子健康成长的作文，我们要用恰当的语言把所列举的内容准确地表达出来。写作中要包含父母对我们的期望、他们的做法、我们的想法和愿望等几个方面进行陈述，表达出习作者自己的观点等。根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般现在时态，人称主要是第一、三人称，注意并列连词的使用及主谓一致问题。写作中注意上下文的过度，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】这篇短文简明、扼要地阐明了自己对于孩子健康成长的见解及自己的观点，并包含了文中所要求的基本信息。其中使用了一些固定句式和短语，包含关联词和句子之间的过度及衔接的准确使用为文章增色不少.如it’s our duty to study，take exercise to keep us healthy， not only...but also，After school，Although，So学习中再注意总结，牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理。