每位同学都希望自己具有良好的人际关系,成为班级中受欢迎的人。请你根据下表所提供的信息,写一篇题为“Being a Popular Student”的英语短文,参加学校网站英语论坛的讨论。
2.短文标题与开头已为你写好,不计入总词数;3.词数:150左右。 Being a Popular Student We all hope to be popular with our classmates and teachers. ____________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________ _____________ _____________ _____________ |
One possible version:
Being a Popular Student
We all hope to be popular with our classmates and teachers .To enjoy popularity , we are supposed to regard the class as our big family and try our best to take an active part in all our class activities. We should be responsible for the work and keep teamwork spirit in mind.
To be a popular student , we must show our respect , concern and sympathy for others .As a result , we never hesitate to lend a hand to those in need .
To be a popular student , we ought to be strict with ourselves in everything we do at school and make an effort to achieve all –round development , being good not only at our lessons but also at sports , music , painting , social services and so on .In time of success we remain modest , while in time of difficulty we keep strong –minded.
All in all, being a popular student among the classmates and teachers comes naturally to those who keep improving their personal qualities.
题目分析:本篇书面表达是要求写一篇题目为“Being a popular student ”的讨论稿。写作内容贴近学生生活,也反映了每个同学的内心愿望,所以同学们写起来应该是得心应手。但是写作时要注意以下几个方面:一 文章要点较多,注意不要遗漏要点。二 从段落安排上可以把要求的三个方面分三段来写,恰当使用关联词,使文章层次分明,条理清楚。三 写作时注意恰当地使用名词,代词单复数形式和标点符号,以免给人内容含混不清的感觉。四 文章内容属于发表个人观点,看法,所以可以用一般现在时态。
【亮点说明】本文在语言表达上清晰流畅,而且要点全面。在段落安排上用三个不定式短语分别引出对集体,对他人,对自己三个方面,使文章层次分明,条理清晰。此外连接词的恰当使用也是本文的一大亮点,比如: not only… but also, while in time of difficulty;all in all ,as a result 等。不仅如此,文中出现的大量短语be popular with, take an active part in, regard .. as , make an effort to ,In time of success ,lend a hand to sb不仅反映出作者词汇的丰富,而且也使文章更加简洁明了,清晰易懂。总之这是一篇优秀的范文。