Saving the Endangered Animals

As is known to everyone, animals are our friends and enjoy the equal right to live happily on earth. However, more than 12,000 species are in danger of extinction. 

There are several reasons for this. The habitats of some animals are disappearing because of pollution and climate change. For example, the global warming melts the ice of the North Pole, endangering the polar bear. Besides, many animals are killed for their body parts. For instance, the Tibetan antelopes are killed because their wool can be made into shawls ,which can bring huge profits.

Fortunately, the governments have set up nature reserves and introduced bans on such illegal trade. Police are

getting tough with poachers and dealers. But it’s also common people’s responsibility to protect them. To avoid more damage to the environment we should live in an environment friendly way. Never buy products made from body parts of endangered animals and tell more people about the situations of the animals. Only when everyone is involved will we save them from extinction.

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