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Many parents are trying to find tutors to teach their children special skills such as music, dancing, calligraphy, painting, chess and so on, hoping they’ll become more successful in the future.

Learning special skills can help children develop both different skills and many interests，which can enrich their lives. Meanwhile, they can broaden their horizons and improve themselves. Besides, they will be more likely to get good jobs in the future.

However, life is hard for these children, who have to spend much time practicing the skills. They hardly have their own time to do what they want. Also, they have to suffer more pressure.  What’s worse , their families have to pay more money for their learning.

Different children have different interests and they do need time to relax. So I think parents should let children do what they’re interested in. Only in this way can they enjoy a happy life.

题目分析：本文属于说明利弊题型，这种题型往往要求先说明一下现状，再对比事物本身的利弊，有时也会单从一个角度（利或弊）出发，最后往往要求考生表明自己的态度（或对事物前景提出预测）。就本文而言，要求根据提示就家长对孩子从小的过度要求，害怕孩子输在起跑线上这一现象写出益处、弊端以及自己的个人观点，所以在谋篇布局上可以用三个段落来分别讲述这三方面内容；此外，作文提示的益处和弊端涉及的内容较多，为了避免内容混乱应当在论述时恰当使用表示顺序的词汇，比如first; second; at last ；one the one hand , one the other hand ; for one thing ; for another thing 等。在时态方面，因为这是一篇论述社会现象的文章，可以使用一般现在时。最后，在语言方面还要注意高级词汇和句式的多变，以提高文章档次。

【亮点说明】在范文开头作者提出家长对孩子们过度要求这一社会现象以及家长们的期望，然后在第二段从三个方面讲述了孩子多学习技艺的好处，作者在此段运用了meanwhile 和besides两个表示层近关系的副词，使得本段内容层次非常清晰。在第三段段首作者首先使用however一词引出了这一现象背后存在的弊端，有效地做到了内容上的过渡，而且在表述时也用到了使文章具有层次感的also, What’s worse 等词汇。最后作者用Different children have different interests and they do need time to relax.作为过渡，提出了自己的观点。这种段落以及层次的安排，不仅使文章结构紧凑，上下衔接自然，也显示了作者思路的清晰和对词汇的准确把握。在句式方面，作者用到了倒装句Only in this way can they enjoy a happy life.，宾语从句I think parents should let children do what they’re interested in.和定语从句life is hard for these children, who have to spend much time practicing the skills.等丰富了文章的句式，成为了文章的一个个亮点。