假如你是李华。你的两位朋友Tom与Peter几天前发生了争吵。3月9日是Peter生日,Tom想送他一个礼物来缓和关系,修复友情,特地发来邮件寻求你的建议。请你根据以下要点给Tom回一封邮件:
1.礼物选择:
2.你的理由;
3.其它和解建议。
注意:
1.词数100左右:
2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯:
3.开头和结尾己给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
a possible version:
Dear Tom,
I’m glad to hear that you are considering making up with Peter. If I were you, I would consider a bike as a birthday present for him.
As far as I know, Peter is always in poor health so he can take more exercise by riding a bike to build up his body. In the meanwhile, you can often go outing by bike together, which is helpful to rebuild your friendship. Besides, taking a bike is an environmentally-friendly means of transport. It’s convenient for him to get around as well.
Apart from giving him a gift, you can also adopt other means, such as travelling, seeing a movie, having dinner and going shopping. No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important. I really hope that we can be good friends forever.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
题目分析:本文要求写一封邮件,同学们对此形式非常熟悉,内容也和学生的生活联系密切,所以写起来应该是得心应手,写作时应注意的问题是:一、仔细审题,写邮件的目的是就道歉的事情寻求建议,所以内容要围绕三个要点展开。二、在写邮件时要开门见山提出写信的目的,就本文而言要首先表明自己对礼物的建议。三、在篇章结构方面,要注意层次性和逻辑性,尤其是在解释理由方面,可以使用一些表示层次的连词,如firstly、secondly、besides、what’s more等。四、在语言方面,要简洁明了,尽量使用多种句式结构以提高文章档次。
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面,层次清晰。开头用虚拟语气的句子委婉地提出了自己的建议。在解释原因和提出其他建议时,作者用到了as far as I know 、in the meanwhile 、besides、apart from等词汇和短语,使段落非常具有层次性,而且还用到了定语从句which is helpful to rebuild your friendship.状语从句Peter is always in poor health so he can take more exercise by riding a bike to build up his body,No matter what you do, being sincere is the most important. I really hope that we can be good friends forever.等复合句,显示了作者对句型结构的准确把握,成为了文章的亮点。