现今孩子迷恋电脑、网络的现象越来越严重,有的孩子甚至足不出户,如何教育引导孩子,成为人们的热点话题。请阅读下面的漫画,按要求用英文写一篇短文。
内容要求:
1.描述漫画内容;
2.分析漫画所揭示的问题;
3.提出你的看法。
注意:
1.短文开头已给出,不计入总词数;
2.考生可适当发挥,使文章内容充实、连贯;
3.词数120左右;
4.文中不能出现考生的具体信息。
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One possible version:
This picture presents to us a scene in which a family of three are walking on a country road. The father is holding a long pole with a computer tied to the end. The son is chasing the computer happily.
It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that some children are so addicted to the Internet that they tend to lock themselves indoors on weekends, playing computer games or surfing the Internet. Consequently, they are becoming more and more reluctant to communicate with their peers.
Personally, the more time children spend on computers, the more physical and mental problems they well suffer from. To rid children of their addiction to the Internet, parents should not only guide them in a proper way but also spare more time to stay with them, such as going out and visiting relatives. Only in this way can they resist the temptation of the Internet and lead a normal life.
根据提示可知这是画图式作文。图画式作文有个典型“三段式”写法。即在第一段描写图画,第二段结合现实生活分析图画的含义,第三段表达个人观点,进行个人总结。因为高考阅卷时间紧张,阅卷老师往往在极短的时间就浏览完文章,所以大家如果能够保证范文章结构衔接紧凑,紧扣题目要求,层次分明的话,往往也不难拿高分。在文章的第一段,作者简单直接用一个限制性定语从句描述图画This picture presents to us a scene,简洁自然。第二段由一个长句和一个短句组成,第一句是根据图画的内容然后描述实际生活现象It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that some children are so addicted to the Internet that they tend to lock themselves indoors on weekends,其中的同位语从句用的恰到好处。最后一段以Personally开始,一个单词就告诉阅卷老师作者的写作意图是归纳总结。这一点也是值得学习的。
【亮点说明】
这篇范文是典型的三段式作文。其结构紧凑,层次分明,文章的段首句都是主题句,然后用几句话分层次展开,简单分析,最后一段按照出题者的要求表明了自己对图画所展示的问题的看法。
这样的文章在高考中是有很大的优势的。老师阅卷是往往没有时间细看每一句,几秒钟就扫视完全篇,在这种情况下,文章的段首句就成了重中之重。范文的段首句This picture presents to us a scene in which a family of three are walking on a country road. 和It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that some children are so addicted to the Internet that they tend to lock themselves indoors on weekends, playing computer games or surfing the Internet. 以及最后一段Personally, the more time children spend on computers, the more physical and mental problems they well suffer from.再加上文章中一些高级词汇如Consequently,reluctant,peers,resist等等,和一些短句如be addicted to, rid of, suffer from, visiting relatives等给文章在细节上添分。